expo: stella - alcoholic drunk known as wife/woman beater Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-01-31 11:03:33

Fairs in, Fuels out. Voted: T_RAWW ~828~ / James 1
Posted on: 2012-01-31 12:50:52

Fair is in. Both need aloot of work to ther verses. Dont be offended by rankings, this is honesty....Future hint: Dont make these categories for voting if you dont plan on doing 60% of them. Voted: T_RAWW ~828~ / James 1
Posted on: 2012-01-31 13:11:39

broken multies no real punches that hit. I think u should take Talk's advise. Tbh this is a pretty weak battle, nothing really stood out from either sides so votes can go either way Voted: T_RAWW ~828~ / James 1
Posted on: 2012-01-31 13:22:37

[T RAWWW]: Your multie scheme is all over the place first of all. You're obviously new so I'm not gonna slam you at all here, rather just give you pointers to improve and adjust to the Letsbeef style of text battling. I advise heading over to the 'Text Lounge' in the forum section, there are many classic battles listed there and tutorials listed that I feel you'd really benefit from. [LUCIO]: First bar was cool, the flow was good and although the multies were basic they were tighter than I've previously seen, but still some kinks to be worked out here. Also, try and make all multies relevent to the punchline, rather than just filling up a flow to the punchline. You could easily cut out half of that bar and make the punch harder, also leaving room for more concepts in the verse. The rest of the verse was ok, but much the same as what I said earlier re multies. Try and think a bit further outside the box for concepts too, check what big news stories there are currently or see what things are popular in the current culture and play on that for inspiration. Obviously that isn't the only thing you can do, but it's an idea for a starting point for you. Improving though, slowly but surely. Fair's in, always 100. PYRO. Voted: T_RAWW ~828~ / James 1
Posted on: 2012-01-31 14:36:39

One's verse was a little bit more polished. His use of internal rhymes and metaphors with cultural references made him look more advanced than his opponent. Both threw a good effort...but Fair is tossed. Voted: T_RAWW ~828~ / James 1
Posted on: 2012-01-31 16:02:26

fv is in lucio this is better than the last battle i rea of yours T_raww i liked your drop and when i read it i though it would have been you i was voting for but lucio just bet you Voted: T_RAWW ~828~ / James 1
Posted on: 2012-02-01 07:57:57

Raw.. ur multis are broken as fuck. and u have no hard punchlines or concepts. you gotta come harder. Luc you gotta have more multi syllables. 2-3 syllable rhymes aint gonna cut it. always AT BARE MINIMUM 4 syllables even if you breakin it up in an A B AB rhyme scheme like you did in ur first couple bars. you really had no hard punchlines like Raw. just better than him enough to take this. i want both of you to check out these guys.. DaDDiO, RULE, UA, Reefer. check out how to text battle effectively. fv. Voted: T_RAWW ~828~ / James 1
Posted on: 2012-02-01 21:15:29

this whas fuccin Horrible. luke wtf. u cudnt have really thought that was a hot drop.from either Mc. yall Need to take it bacc to tha lab and fiqure out whats qoin on. fvs dropped tho. Voted: T_RAWW ~828~ / James 1
Posted on: 2012-02-02 06:43:09

One had broken multies, other had weak punches. Expo would be swaying here. Voted: T_RAWW ~828~ / James 1
Posted on: 2012-02-02 16:51:37

RAW i think your verse was more keystyled, i think you could benefit from putting some thought and structure behind your bars, you had a good battle attack going in hard on your opponent, but the multies were broke, punches needed improving, and your wording could be stepped up also. Trying to be as positive as possible, it's not hate just helping you elevate. Lucio- started off pretty slow but picked up towards the end, work on that consistency. quite basic first few lines but worked nice with the concept. The nikey punch was nice and from there on out i thought you really improved from your last few battles. Concepts were good, a bit played but you executed them in quite a creative way. Overall i think this could have been better, but you can both step it up. mid ** high ** Voted: T_RAWW ~828~ / James 1
Posted on: 2012-02-02 17:54:28