Yup, we have a diagnosis doc... its CLASSICK!!! Posted on: 2010-07-09 04:42:18

if u dont understand sumthin pm for expos... JEDIGRYM DBD! Comment Only
Posted on: 2010-07-09 00:55:32

CLASSICK! Comment Only
Posted on: 2010-07-09 01:13:25

fv gb vb keep at it Voted: Carlos Brigante /
Posted on: 2010-07-09 03:11:34

pretty easy here.. one took with much stronger punches and some real dope concepts Voted: Carlos Brigante /
Posted on: 2010-07-09 03:24:47

^^ lol @ dis nigga... Comment Only
Posted on: 2010-07-09 03:48:58

carlos be more clear and take out all them symbols that takes away from it c tezzy good job but it was just a little too simplified in my opinion gb tho Voted: Carlos Brigante /
Posted on: 2010-07-09 05:46:36

One was WAY off and just wasn't a good drop. The other came solid all around. Voted: Carlos Brigante /
Posted on: 2010-07-09 10:17:02

DBD Comment Only
Posted on: 2010-07-09 11:05:11

DBD...we here...Let's get it Comment Only
Posted on: 2010-07-09 18:26:01

No Hate, Fair One's In. You Know It's Fair. -Stu Voted: Carlos Brigante /
Posted on: 2010-07-10 00:43:21

dammit, yall gonna make me do a full expo and shit lol. here we go Teezy - Look, My HANDS'LL HIT 'EM.. Closest he comes to cops? Is because this MAN'S A VICTIM! So how do you Dump-The-Tool when you wouldn't "Be On A Grind, And Bust-A-Move" if you DANCED WITH BITCHES!? liked the bust a move reference here. and the victim jab was decent. thought the flow was a bit weird, which is usually a strong point for you. next line..... Plus, Those TECHS THAT YOU BLOW, TIGER? IT'S JUST FICTION! But when it comes to Dick-Then you'll see "Car Go Up And Down" like MEXICAN LOW RIDERS AND ROUGH SHIPMENTS!! huge multi there and the wordplay, while basic, was a nice set-up to the punch. however with the length of the multi, it made the punch hit softer cause it made the wording awkward. next line......You're getting SCARRED, THIS WHORE'S WORTHLESS AND I'll put "Los In A Box" like HARDWARE STORE PURCHASES!! kinda throwaway line for me, made sense but didnt really hit all that hard. next line.... He ain't 'ARMED' AND 'MAN TELLS' LIES! I'll put "Clips Into Brig" like throwing them into ARMY JAIL CELLS, AIGHT!? again kinda throwaway, wasnt really hard hitting at all. next line So this FAG'S DYING! I'll KILL THIS FAIRY, NOT HURT HER... So you'll see "Car Meet A Wall" like BAD DRIVING and MILITARY DESERTERS!! nice concept here, liked how you got the 'car meet a wall' to refer to two different things, was dope. i thought it could have been worded better tho. my advice would be that you focus less on nameplay, cause you have the concepts to be better than that. overall decent drop.......Carlos - this'll have to be quick cause i gotta jump off in a minute. your concepts are there from the other verses i've read, but your wording is off and is making your flow choppy. agreed with others, you gotta get all the decoration of punctuation marks outta there, make it look tidy. sorry about the lack of expo for yours fam, if you need one PM me when you see me on next. fair is in, one got it because punches were more relevant to the opponent. Voted: Carlos Brigante /
Posted on: 2010-07-10 06:18:20