very good verse. you used this before huh? Comment Only
Posted on: 2009-07-14 16:46:48

by the way send me eight bro. Comment Only
Posted on: 2009-07-14 16:47:03

i didnt use it b4 i sent it n they never write back no point in putin good shit 2 waste Comment Only
Posted on: 2009-07-14 16:51:25

o got this.i jus finished a 16.. Comment Only
Posted on: 2009-07-14 16:58:45

No Hate .... fv Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-14 17:05:17

awwww...i was gonna get at this....gunna i sent u 16...reply back Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-14 17:07:04

tc came harder. Yo shit ill Gunna but it would have made a better cyph. fv...vb Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-14 17:12:08

spillin it.. Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-14 17:18:17

ripped it Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-14 17:21:17

gb one kame harder ay trill since ur pretty gud DROP A FAIR EDUCATED VOTE ON MAH BATTLE WIT WONDER GURL......MAYB ITS JUSS ME R CHIC GOT MAD DICK RYDERS I DNT KNO U TELL ME Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-14 17:29:39

NEVA H8 Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-14 17:30:20

So its like this, and respect it. Gunna: "comein outa LOS my name is "YOUNG GUNNA"sellin dope since i was lil wished my child hood woulda been "FUNNA" in my red monkey jean packets is "CRACK ROCKS" ever since i was 9 been holdin"BLACK GLOCKS" gettin money 2 live well was my "TASK" would rob shops wit my "MASK" been saggin dickies ever since i was "NINE" went to court got out im "FINE" my mind so fast dat i can "RHYME" dis is in a short amount of "TIME" dis lil letsbeef shit is already "MINE" - very simplistic on the rhyme scheme bro. You'll want to start learning to incorporate multis into your verse to enhance the rhyme scheme and complexity. Most importantly, you need to work on setting up hard hitting punches with quality wordplay, metas, and similies. Hit me up if you need tips/advice. "dont hate me cuz my rhymes are so fuckin "ILL" just pray n hope u got da "WILL" to survive wen u crash in to "ME" dont trip diz rhymes aint got no "FEE" being a lyrical mc is in "MY VAINS" gone threw so much no1 can survive "MY PAINS" never heard dis before u thinkin im "INSANE" always smokein purple kush never "HASH" went head 2 head wita bullet n survived the "CRASH" - this has no place in a battle homie. It's just rhyming about yourself in a topical fashion and doing nothing to attack your opponent. "got tats on my "FACE N BACK" slowed my pace n ya "FACE IN TACKED" know how to rhyme "EVERY SINGLE WAY" been freestyle rappin "EVERY SINGLE DAY" got a knife in my hand who am i guna "SHANK" my rhymes huge like a army "TANK" ya momma told me u have a dick like a "ASIAN" you rap like a muthafuckin "CAUCASIAN" cuz u whiter den fat boi "MASTERBATION" - getting a little better here although you're still spending too much time rappin about yourself. "keep my shit hood so i aint on ya "RADIO STATION" dont like rap good cuz it aint ya "OCCUPATION" cant stop me so stop tapin my "CONVERSATION" u just mad cuz my pistols go "BOOM BOOM CLAP" n ya nasty ass car goes "VROOM VROOM CRAP" dont tell me ya car "BROKE" n u cant fix it cuz u "BROKE" cuz all u do is stay at home and "STROKE" ya lil dick ya raps so old they bout 2 geta "STROKE" get outa here cuz u gana "CHOKE" n i wit diz "SHIT" ima get in my sidekick n call a "HIT" on all u "LAMES" wen all u dead im da 1 to "BLAME" - still needs a lot of work brother. Take this criticism constructively and use it to build and elevate. We all gotta start somewhere. Trill: " claimin TRILL AINT GOT NO SWAG'GER? not "pissed" cuz u STILL CANT STOP YO BLAD"DER he SPILLS ALOT WHEN LAUGHTER starts, ull FEEL HIS HOT DISASTER! meanin his "flows" only "luke' warm, so his jedi SKILLS'LL POP UP AFTER he "baits/bates"the PILLS HE POPS TA MASTER!!" - there's some good content here but its not tied together very sensibly so I'm not clearly following what you're saying. Keep working on the sensibility factor bro. "hes "always' PADDED IN A SWORD FIGHT..his bytche leaves me MADDER WHEN THE WHORE BITES but im GLADDER THAN BEFORE, WHY? cuz im 'only killin one hoe' this 'phony stealin dumb votes' cuz HALF UR FANS ADORE LIFE!!" - same thing here. When you read it back to yourself, ask yourself what you're accomplishing with a bar and whether or not its being clearly conveyed. Never sacrifice the quality of your content for multis. "but ill SNATCH UR GLANDS AND CHORDS LIKE a BATCH OF GRANNIES SMORES, IGHT!! (now thats fast) still..ill leave'eam DEAD AND DIRTY ON A LUMP, dude SAID HED HURT ME WIT A "PUMP"..n e "facts thats hes real?' other than he "acts in (high heels) but not lik EDDY MURPHY FROM DA KLUMPS!" - this was better here. You actually brought a sensible punch that worked fairly well. "this cats PUNCHES ARE MEANINGLISS leave'eam wit NUTHIN BUT BLEEDING FISTS cuz TOUCHINGS DECEIVEING BYTCH..cuz homie..only if 1 of my "bars" dont fit would u have SUMTHIN TO BEAT ME WIT! ill CRUNCH THIS PALEGIC QUICK i make LUNCH WIT STRATIGIC SCRIPTS a BUNCH OF THE CHEEZIEST..add the "caffinated drinks" which leed to 'dilapataded things' hes "ass up" wonderin whats UP WIT THE "T " IN THIS!!" - decent, still struggling to put all your concepts together sensibly. "ima LEED THIS OPEN 16.LEAVE YA CHOAKED LIK BRITS BE(silent) SEE THE HOPE THIS BYTCH BRINGS? NOPE HIS SHITS CLEAN.wait! he wont get "full on dick" factor the fear we lik PLEASE JUS COPE WIT YA SIK DREAMS!! and dont FANTASIZE OF TRILL tho my TANTALIZING SKILL! will leave ur "pressent" state a 'bloody mess' but SANTA LIKE U STILL!!(cheer up)! i wont EAT YA COOKIES but ill DEFEAT YA ROOKIES hes CHEATIN? COULD BE..he'll never 'fit mah shoes' but ill CLEET YA GOODIES in 'pitch black' u wont SEE THA HOODY!! cuz i cant 'face the haters' that 'chase mah paper' now they lik damn! T.C. IS WOODSY!! thats swagger" - more of the same. Take my advice and keep building bro. You still got this one though. Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-14 18:00:28

To much damn reading...LOL....... ........BUT all in all a GOOD battle...i think ^^^^ King of sparta's explanation jus about sums u my feelings on this battle too...Good but cud use improvment.....No hate to neone...HOLLA...drop pin double 9's for the time put into this ish.... Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-14 18:09:16

trill got the vote! Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-14 18:56:30

lil gunna was more of a cypher so my vote goes to trill Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-14 19:03:45

wow dat shit was hot But lil gunna got my vote SUWOOP!! NIGGA BLOOD LINE 100TH STREET Comment Only
Posted on: 2009-07-14 19:31:59

OUCH HOT SHIT SUWOOP!!! Comment Only
Posted on: 2009-07-14 19:33:03

SUWOOP!!! WHERE MY BLOODS AT!!! Comment Only
Posted on: 2009-07-14 19:33:56

GOD DAMN Comment Only
Posted on: 2009-07-14 19:35:39

no hate, easy choice Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-14 21:10:10

^^ruburt?..u a multi accnt..loks lik u tried votein 3 tymes...nuthin...u do know multie accnts cant vote on tey own battles right..IT WONT LET U Comment Only
Posted on: 2009-07-15 06:57:22

*FVC* Lil Gunna- your verse wasnt much of a diss you were basically telling kinda of a story braggin bout yaself, towards the end you brough in some punches, But they werent hard hitters fam. Work on punches first then flow. Trill_Concept z- this is not the first 16 line battle you've done, i've seen one vs Mr. D lol, anyway for an open battle you did this 16 quite fast, and it worked out in your favor, you brought more categories to the table here, Your flow was smooth, and you did incorporate some nice punches, although you did use some simple wordplay but then again simple worplay sometimes works out better. anyway im voting for the verse that was just more polished, Return the Fairness, N8 Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-15 08:35:57

^^totally forgot that was a 16.nice call out..still..my 2nd 16..other one was 100 battles ago..lol..thanks for the fair votes..but when did 16s get such low votes Comment Only
Posted on: 2009-07-15 09:06:46

yall know im playin right..lol.. Comment Only
Posted on: 2009-07-15 09:12:22

fair vote is in. Lets say i'm pretty generous with votes. But fair is in. Vote the fuck back &fair. pm for expo Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-15 09:28:32

dat ruburt aint my account dawg idk whos it is i dont even know da nigga Comment Only
Posted on: 2009-07-15 22:16:10

ezzzz mak Voted: Lil Gunna / ItzNDaSawce
Posted on: 2009-07-17 03:21:06